Fereza Arientama

A twenty one-year-old boy named Fereza Arientama or can be called as Reza, live his life as a college student but also work in a lamp factory as a design graphic. He was a student of Technical Information in the University 45 Surabaya. He lived on jalan pakis tirtosari 10 number 45 in Surabaya. He lived there with his mother and also two of his younger brothers which were a seventh grader named Ferano and also an eighth grader Ferino. His parents were divorced because of some family problem which his father had caused. That is one of the reasons why he was working and also being a college student.

He was born when Santa clause came, same date as Christmas which was in December 25th 1995. He was born in a cesarean way, there was a funny story behind that. At that time, his mother, wanted to give birth normally and in front of her there was a patient which did the same thing as her. However, she was on process of giving birth and the problem was the doctor forgot to close the curtains. Therefore, Reza’s mother could see what was happening and saw the female part of the patient opening very wide and it get wider while the doctor tried to help the baby to get out. Hence, his mother was afraid and frightened so she told the doctor to do cesarean section.

Reza spent most of his childhood in Petemon, Surabaya. He lived there with lots of his father’s family. There are Reza’s grandmother lots of uncles and aunts, also lots of cousins, nieces and also nephews. His father named Arivin and his mother named Endang Hastuti. Reza’s father works as a computer programmer. Whereas his mother works as someone who fixed someone’s glasses, for example when they have nearsightedness and they need to wear glasses and get their glasses fixed. At the age of 17, Reza, her mother and his brothers moved to Pakis, Surabaya. They were moving because of the family problem and also the divorce.

It was a tough situation for all of them. However the decision has been made and he had to live his life separated from his father. He usually visits his father every weekend but he has not done that much recently, because of his college, work and also homework is taking over his live recently. However, he is still in touch with his father. He has to work at 07.30 in the morning and come home at around 5p.m. After that, he has to change up his clothes and get ready to go to college at 6p.m until 9p.m and sometimes can be 9.30p.m. Luckily, his college is near to his house so it is a little bit relieving.

 The reasons why he chooses to work and also be in college are to find new experiences and he likes to take risk. However, the most important reason is to help lessen his mother’s burden and to earn a living for their everyday live. His first job was working in a little magazine company as a graphic designer, since he was studying graphic design when he was in vocational school. When he got his first salary, he spent it on buying new application for his computer to improve his computer programming skill. And he gave the rest of his salary to his mother. Not long after that, he tried to look for a different company because it takes a long time to get there and it was far from his house. Moreover, the salary was not enough for him and his family everyday live and he had spent lots of money for the petrol.

Two days after his interview, he was accepted in a lamp company as a graphic designer. Working and being a college student at the same time is a bit difficult. He said he really learns to manage all of his time. He also said that everything that he does and every second that he spent counts. Before that, he was a very lazy person and sometimes he did not take a shower in the weekend because he was too lazy.

Ever since he is working, he experiences a lot of things. He realized that he has to look neat and smells good if he is working for someone. He also has to make a good impression so that he can keep his job and if he is lucky enough, he can get promoted. Timing is everything, he needs to plan out when is the time to work, college, assignments, eat, shower, and also doing the household.

Reza’s passion is to take pictures of scenery and also people. It is like he was seeing something much better through his lenses. At first, he dreamed to be a programmer, but since his mother could not afford the school, he decided to go to vocational school and he took graphic design. At first, he did not like to draw nor paint. However, he has to learn to do so. In the progress, he had done a pretty great job compared to his previous drawing skill. He manages to do that because he had a very simple motivation, which is to be a better son for his mother so that he can lessen his mother burden. Recently, his dreams are to open up a photography company and also being a programmer.

These are fun facts about Reza. He was a very active child when he was a little. He was always bedwetting until he was in the 11th grade. He also drinks tons of water, maybe that is one of the reason he is bedwetting. When he was in vocational school, he always rode a bike and on his way home when he got no water to drink, he swallowed his saliva. The longest time that he did not take a shower was 5 days, but he changed his underwear of course. He wants to meet Hitler if he could. Family means everything for him, and it is his number one priority. He is a temperamental person. When he was a child, he likes to sip his thumb all the time, and it stopped when he was in 12th grade. He likes to sleep when he got nothing to do.

Another fun facts about him, is that once he was very tired from work and he slept for a while, and when he woke up, he realized that he was late. He hurried to change his clothes without looking in the mirror. Hence, he did up his button the wrong way, the first button went to the second hole and the third when to the fourth and so on. He was looking like that the whole time until he go to the class and his friend laughed at him.  

Fourth Journal

Hi Friends!

This is going to be my last journal for my writing class. As you read my previous post, I had written some pretty good narrative story, I might say. So maybe if you are interested, you can go ahead and read it and maybe give a feedback to help me improve my writing skills, I will appreciate that. Maybe if you do not want to search my post you could just click this “my narrative story” and it will pop into your screen.

Anyway, I have never made a narrative story before. Well, I read lots of narrative but I had never made one before. I was pretty excited, as I said in my previous journal, when I heard that our next assignment was making a narrative. I have always liked some kind of fairytale and fiction story, also the romance one of course, because romance story is so interesting to read. 

The story that I made was about a father and his son in days of yore. It was a little bit hard to make it because of several things. The first is about the language. In my opinion, story that was in days of yore should be written in different language, but mine was still not well written. Well at least I have tried okay, hehehe… Second was, I still have some difficulties of making the conflict of the story. It is not easy to make a story because you had to think about the conflict and the ending. If the conflict on the story is not interesting, well, you will not get lots of readers. Some thing applied on the ending of the story. The third was, I still had problems with the grammar and I often forget when I write narrative I should use past or past perfect or past continuous. I also did not pay much attention on the little things such as the punctuation marks and capital letter. However, I still manage to get my story done and I am pretty happy about it.

Overall, I still had to improve myself because I still do not pay closer attention on the small thing and also the important things. I will try to learn every single day like what Taylor Smith does. If you do not know who Taylor Smith is, then you have not read my narrative story and I suggest you to read it, if you want to. Also do not forget to give comments. Thank you!!!

Hidden Treasure (part 3) -ending-

After a long game of staring, he did not find anything. He was there for two days, because of that reason, he decided to go home. This time, he spent less time because he already knew the way and also had been experienced it before. He was very glad when he arrived at Storybroke. He stopped for a moment and think about the treasure, he was afraid if his father was disappointed at him. However, he putted himself together and run to his house.

When he got in, he saw Ella sweeping the floor. She looked at him and hugged him. Taylor asked where John was, but her eyes started to poured down some tears. She reached something in the pocket of her dress. Turned out it was a letter. Taylor was curious and he opened the letter quickly.

Well done my son,

By the time you read this letter, you probably back from your long journey. I am very sorry to put you in a lot of pain. I hope you understand the reason why I am doing this. I believe that you have learned a lot during your journey. I am very proud of you because you survive and hopefully you are as healthy as a horse, not that I did not feel proud of you before. I have always been proud to have a son like you, remember that. You probably feel disappointed right now because you did not find any treasure there, don’t you? Once again, I apologize because I had lied to you. The truth is you already find all of the treasures along your journey. Remember everything that you have done, I am pretty sure you have done lots of incredible things. I really want to hear every single bit of your story, but it seems that time is running out for me. However, I do not have to worry anymore because I know now that you had already known how to deal with things. Do not stop just yet, learn every single day and you will be surprise of what you have got. I’m sorry for everything that I do wrong. My love won’t disappear even if I won’t be there for you.

                                                                                                                                    Love,

                                                                                                                             Your Father

Tear was running hard down his face after he read it. He was feeling sad and regretting about the past. How he wished that he could go back in time and tried to be a better son, but it was too late. He promised to his father that he would be a better person and he except what had happened. He knew that his father was happy up there.

Few weeks later, Taylor was working as a baker and he always helped everyone, and he became wiser every single day. He was also finding himself falling in love with a girl named Sierra. They both loved each other and decided to get married 3 years after that.

Hidden Treasure (part 2)

John took a deep breath before he started to say anything to his son. After a long breathe, he finally ready to say something, “My son, I want you to pick up a bag inside that big wardrobe” Taylor moved his body and he looked at the big wardrobe. He opened the wardrobe and he searched for the bag which his father had told him. He grabbed an outworn big brown leather sling bag. The bag was a little bit heavy and it got lots of things inside. John then explained what the purpose of it. He also explained each of the items which were inside the bag. There were four piece of clothing for each season, a blanket, some food, a penknife, one bottle of water, and a map.

He then told his son to find a treasure which everyone would die for. Taylor asked to his father what the treasure was, but John said he did not know since he never once looked for it. At first, Taylor was half-hearted, he was worrying about his father’s condition and thought that no one would take care of him, furthermore he was slothful. However, John insisted and soft-soaped his son, telling him that he would be okay by the time he got back.

Taylor then asked one of his neighbor, Leah, an old widow, and asked if she could take care of his father while he gone. Since she got nothing to do and no child to be nurse of, she agreed. Taylor was very thankful to Leah and he decided to go on a journey to find the treasure. He hugged his father and glanced at him one more time, then he was off and away.

As Taylor walked eagerly, he felt a bit tired. He found a small river and he decided to stop and rest under a big tree. He opened his bag and look for something to eat, it turned out that the food inside his bag was raw, all of them were raw. He started to panic wherefore he did not know anything about cooking raw food in the wild. He then stood up and tried to look for some fruit. As he walked round, he came across a berry tree. He was not sure if the berry was poisonous or not, on the other hand he was starving. After a long term of thinking, he decided not to eat the berry and went back to the tree.

At the time he got back, he found a bear rummaged his bag. As his bag was full of raw fish and some chicken meat, “Oh for heaven’s sake, seriously?.” He wanted the bear to go away but he did not know what to do. Suddenly, the bear deflect its head and realized that he was being spotted by Taylor. The bear rushed to catch Taylor and he immediately run and looked for a tree. He climbed up the tree and hoped for the bear to go away. He felt terrified and he got sweat running down his body making his clothes soaking wet. 

After a long period of time, the bear got bushed and went away. Taylor climbed down slowly and made his way back to the big tree where he left his bag. Whacked, starved, froze gathered up when he discovered that there was no food left inside the bag. When the day started to turn dark, Taylor changed his wet clothes into a warmer one and he attempted to rest. Of course he did not sleep like a log, since he was starving and it was freezing and lots of insect had bite him.

It had been three days of suffering and Taylor had not eaten yet, all he had was just water. He filled up his bottle with water from the river. In the morning, he felt so desperate and he was thinking of going back home. Just when he started to pack up his bag, he saw a big frog hopped around nearby. He skulked and approached the frog carefully. When the frog tried to escape, he rushed to catch it and he succeeded. He put it in to a plastic bag which was used as his previous food and tied it up. He looked for some lumber and dry grasses. He attempted to make a fire to cook the frog. After some time, he managed to make up the fire. “At last!”, he said. After having a very light breakfast, he then continued following the map in search for the treasure.

Time had gone quickly and the weather had changed into winter. Taylor did not know what time it was, all he knew was light and dark. Along his journey he had learned how to make a spear from a bamboo and use it to haunt for food. He had been walking so far until he could not feel the soreness in his feet. All he had in his mind was finding the treasure and brought it back to his father.

After a long walk, he finally saw a village which was written in the map as his final destination, he hoped that he could find the treasure. The village was much bigger than Storybroke, but the villagers were different. Unlike Storybroke which all of the villagers lived in equal condition and shared what they have between one and other, this village was horrible. They were careless, arrogant and they also did not care about their neighbors. When he got to a market, everybody was yelling at each other with a high tone voice and all their food was not fresh.

Then Taylor felt hungry, “What should I buy? Everything in here smells like dirt”. Suddenly, he saw a bakery, “Perhaps I could go in there and have a look”. He then bought a medium size bread with sugar dust on top and a bottle of milk, since his money was only enough to buy those. Leaving the bakery, he saw a little girl and an old man sitting on the other side of the road. They look frizzing and starving. He then approached them and asked them, “Hello there, may I know your name?”

“Hi Mister, I’m Jade and this is my grandfather Neil”, the little girl answered with a trembled sound and the old man smiled.

“Please, just call me Taylor little J. Don’t you have somewhere to warm you up?”, asked Taylor.

“We used to have one, but we got kicked out because we have to sell it for our debt of buying food, since I don’t have a job anymore”, said Neil stumbling.

Looking at them, reminded him of his father. He wondered how he was right now and he missed him so much. After a hard deliberation with himself, Taylor decided to give his bread and milk to them. They were very grateful, jade had a big smiled and hugged him. Then he left to continue his journey. Taylor then reached to the place where the treasure was hidden, he hasted and looked at every single spot. After a long game of staring, he …

Want to know what Taylor had found? Find out in my next post which will be up very soon. See you all!

Hidden Treasure (part 1)

Once there was an old man named "John Smith" who lived in a village called "Storybroke". He had a wrinkled oval face and grey hair. He worked as a baker and he always helps everyone who needed his help and advice. He was a very wise and kind man, therefore everyone like to be around him. Storybroke was a peaceful small village which was surrounded by big trees and dense forest. There were also a big waterfall, rivers and beautiful parks. Most of the villagers worked as farmers and bakers.

John Smith lived with his son named “Taylor Smith”. His wife passed away when she gave birth to his son. Taylor was a young handsome and spoiled teenager. He had a straight brown hair and an oval face. He hardly ever worked hard and helped his father. All he done was just adding burden to his father. However, he loved his father very much.

As time went by, John could not stop aging and his body became weaker every single day.  He started to think about his son and imagined how he will live without him. Suddenly, something came up in his mind.

He immediately called his son, “Taylor, my son, come here for a second”

Taylor walked to his father and asked, “What is it again? I thought I already filled up your glass. Do you need more water?”

“That is not the reason why I called you”, John said.

“Let me guess, you want me to go catch the chicken again, aren’t you?” said Taylor with a really annoying tone.

“It’s not that either”, said John in a soft and limp tone.

“Then what is it Father? Just go ahead and say it. I’m getting tired standing here and waiting for you.” Taylor grumbled.

John tried to rise and sit, leaning his back to the wall “You know that I’m in a bad condition and I was not able to do anything like I used to before. You have already grown into a man now and I want you to do something for me. You have to hear me out before you speak out your mind”, said John with a really serious face impression.

Taylor looked into his father face and nodded. He was curious about it and he could not wait any longer. He positioned his body near his father so that he could hear carefully about what his father is going to say.

John took a deep breath before he starts to say anything to his son. After a long breathe, he finally ready to say something. “My son, I want you to …”

Okay, I had to stop right there to make you curious about what Taylor’s father is going to say. Did you enjoy reading it guys? If so, do you have any idea of what John is going to say to his son? To find out the rest of the story, just keep your eyes open for my next post. Love you!